I'm not sure how to make sense of this poem, especially of the last two lines. But, the emotional-psychological impact of the last two lines is strongly felt.Chen-ou
Hi Chen-ou, I've revised my poem. Maybe you will like it better...Hope you're well,Kay
I didn't see the original but this vevision is very effective. Walking-the-plank, "shell" of a ship one can't return to as the wind picks-up...harrowing.