I think the italicized "away" here works. It suggests a change in register and level, even from life to death. I find this a very sobering, frightening poem. Exceptional, Kay.
Chen-ou: I have no idea why I italicized the word. I think it resounded in my head a certain way and it needed distinction. Many times I write first and think later. Sometimes it works better that way. :)
Brian: So glad to have your comments again. Surprisingly, there is a window of writing time each day, and it seems to be very therapeutic. I hope to be back for a while.
To all! Notice: Pajamas has been writing a steady stream this December. What a nice surprise for the holidays!!
Such succinct an touching images... I can feel the ache in this.
ReplyDeleteIt's nice to hear from you, Francis. Thank you for your comment. It means a lot to me.
ReplyDelete~Kay
Kay, I second Francis.
ReplyDeleteMay I ask why you italicized "away"? (maybe I missed something)
Chen-ou
I think the italicized "away" here works. It suggests a change in register and level, even from life to death. I find this a very sobering, frightening poem. Exceptional, Kay.
ReplyDeleteHello friends. Thank you for such kind words.
ReplyDeleteChen-ou: I have no idea why I italicized the word. I think it resounded in my head a certain way and it needed distinction. Many times I write first and think later. Sometimes it works better that way. :)
Brian: So glad to have your comments again. Surprisingly, there is a window of writing time each day, and it seems to be very therapeutic. I hope to be back for a while.
To all! Notice: Pajamas has been writing a steady stream this December. What a nice surprise for the holidays!!
With love,
Kay