Astonishing. One of your best. This could even be labeled a tanka sequence per Denis Garrison's definition. I can already feel that it will stay with me for some time to come.
Brian, you've just validated a "subjected" (term by Neal Whitman) poem. Thank you. Somehow, I'm glad to be able to put it up here, and at this time of year...Always,Kay
...there is a lot of meaning to it. the singing swans, in ancient mythology meaning a menacing death - the constellation of stars - cygnus... I am a bit cold now, the sirens' decibel made me shiver....great poemgabriele
Dear Lady Gabriele, I will try to write a warmer poem for you. Thank you for your understanding.Always,Kay
Kay, your use of one-word lines (verbs) is impressive.Nicely done.Chen-ou
Many thanks, Chen-ou. Your comment has lifted my spirits. :)~Kay