Saturday, May 7, 2011

cause and effect

painting the sun
in the light of the moon
I beam at the coolness
I engender

4 comments:

  1. SO good. The double reading in the first two lines is superb. Poignant and artful without a trace of melodrama.

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  2. I'm so glad you like it. Your comment has made my day.

    ~Kay

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  3. I second Brian. And the title works effectively and leaves something unsaid for the reader to ponder.

    Kay, Happy Mother's Day!!

    Chen-ou

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  4. Thank you, Chen-ou! It was a nice day. I hope you are well. Send an e-mail sometime soon!
    ~Kay

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