SO good. The double reading in the first two lines is superb. Poignant and artful without a trace of melodrama.
I'm so glad you like it. Your comment has made my day.~Kay
I second Brian. And the title works effectively and leaves something unsaid for the reader to ponder.Kay, Happy Mother's Day!!Chen-ou
Thank you, Chen-ou! It was a nice day. I hope you are well. Send an e-mail sometime soon!~Kay