Wednesday, November 2, 2011

fallen fruit

see the apple lose its blush
bruised, it waits
alone
on the pebbles

4 comments:

  1. Kay,

    I love the poetry of indirection. Gogyohshi poet, Aizu Taro, taught me the Japanese concept of yoin a while back, a kind of intentional ambiguity that allows for rich in-reading. I could sit with your bruised fruit for hours.

    Brian

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  2. another apple
    bruise hides bruise
    the pair
    transform
    the pebbles

    Thank you, generous friend.
    ~Kay

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  3. And thank you, generous poet.

    Brian

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  4. Kay, a delicious poem. However, I think the title is not effectively utilized. It's because its meaning is already expressed in the poem text.

    A new title might strengthen the poem.

    Just a thought.

    By the way, unlike Brian, I just want to take the first bite of the apple. LOL!


    Chen-ou

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