Kay, I love the poetry of indirection. Gogyohshi poet, Aizu Taro, taught me the Japanese concept of yoin a while back, a kind of intentional ambiguity that allows for rich in-reading. I could sit with your bruised fruit for hours.Brian
another applebruise hides bruisethe pairtransformthe pebblesThank you, generous friend.~Kay
And thank you, generous poet.Brian
Kay, a delicious poem. However, I think the title is not effectively utilized. It's because its meaning is already expressed in the poem text.A new title might strengthen the poem.Just a thought.By the way, unlike Brian, I just want to take the first bite of the apple. LOL!Chen-ou
Kay,
ReplyDeleteI love the poetry of indirection. Gogyohshi poet, Aizu Taro, taught me the Japanese concept of yoin a while back, a kind of intentional ambiguity that allows for rich in-reading. I could sit with your bruised fruit for hours.
Brian
another apple
ReplyDeletebruise hides bruise
the pair
transform
the pebbles
Thank you, generous friend.
~Kay
And thank you, generous poet.
ReplyDeleteBrian
Kay, a delicious poem. However, I think the title is not effectively utilized. It's because its meaning is already expressed in the poem text.
ReplyDeleteA new title might strengthen the poem.
Just a thought.
By the way, unlike Brian, I just want to take the first bite of the apple. LOL!
Chen-ou