Kay, your verb choices make the poem effective.However, I'm not sure the effectiveness of "shameless." (it's little strong, and it changes the tone of the poem)Maybe I'm missing something here.Chen-ou
Thank you Chen-ou, I always welcome your critiques. :)~Kay
I've made a slight edit or two...
Kay, your verb choices make the poem effective.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I'm not sure the effectiveness of "shameless." (it's little strong, and it changes the tone of the poem)
Maybe I'm missing something here.
Chen-ou
Thank you Chen-ou, I always welcome your critiques. :)
ReplyDelete~Kay
I've made a slight edit or two...
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