Monday, September 19, 2011

wake-up calls

Morning 1:

filtered
a maple leaf
percolates
the sun

Morning 2:

shameless
the wood strips
sapping
the truth

3 comments:

  1. Kay, your verb choices make the poem effective.

    However, I'm not sure the effectiveness of "shameless." (it's little strong, and it changes the tone of the poem)

    Maybe I'm missing something here.


    Chen-ou

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  2. Thank you Chen-ou, I always welcome your critiques. :)

    ~Kay

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