tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post3999874933227319818..comments2023-05-23T06:27:45.215-07:00Comments on Immersed in Word: wake-up callsKay Tracyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07204653574216344790noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-66734831326364758062011-09-21T00:34:53.488-07:002011-09-21T00:34:53.488-07:00I've made a slight edit or two...I've made a slight edit or two...Kay Tracyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07204653574216344790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-42934649007071708312011-09-20T21:35:36.430-07:002011-09-20T21:35:36.430-07:00Thank you Chen-ou, I always welcome your critiques...Thank you Chen-ou, I always welcome your critiques. :)<br /><br />~KayKay Tracyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07204653574216344790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-56816358191447825512011-09-20T18:51:09.763-07:002011-09-20T18:51:09.763-07:00Kay, your verb choices make the poem effective.
H...Kay, your verb choices make the poem effective.<br /><br />However, I'm not sure the effectiveness of "shameless." (it's little strong, and it changes the tone of the poem)<br /><br />Maybe I'm missing something here.<br /><br /><br />Chen-ouChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com