Thursday, February 17, 2011

wooly whirled

loom in eight
warped wefty sleeps

the lashes waver
lifting weights

wafting waves
leaving wings

the dream is just
about ...

3 comments:

  1. Kay, I'm not sure if the last three one-line stanzas work effectively.

    Here is my suggested revision:

    the dream is just
    about...to wake

    Just a thought.

    Chen-ou

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  2. Really fun and musical, Kay. Those W's are great.

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  3. Thank you, both, for commenting on my silliness. I did decide to leave the ending with room for imagination.

    That's what nonsense is all about!
    Cheers,
    Kay

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