Kay, I'm not sure if the last three one-line stanzas work effectively. Here is my suggested revision:the dream is justabout...to wakeJust a thought.Chen-ou
Really fun and musical, Kay. Those W's are great.
Thank you, both, for commenting on my silliness. I did decide to leave the ending with room for imagination.That's what nonsense is all about!Cheers,Kay
Kay, I'm not sure if the last three one-line stanzas work effectively.
ReplyDeleteHere is my suggested revision:
the dream is just
about...to wake
Just a thought.
Chen-ou
Really fun and musical, Kay. Those W's are great.
ReplyDeleteThank you, both, for commenting on my silliness. I did decide to leave the ending with room for imagination.
ReplyDeleteThat's what nonsense is all about!
Cheers,
Kay