Both very lyrical with their on and off rhymes. Lovely.
Kay, I second Brian. And the imagery is arresting.May I ask what "city of Tena's breath" refers to?Chen-ou
Hi all,Thank you for your comments.Chen-ou: the city of Tena is a play on tenacity.:o)~Kay
Kay,Thanks for telling me this. I didn't catch it in the first place. It adds an extra level of meaning to the poem.Chen-ou