Arresting imagery. Nicely done.I think this poem will work even better if it is rewritten in the form of a one-liner.Just a thought.Chen-ou
A one-liner arrest. :o) Thanks, Chen-ou. I'll give it a go.Lizzie starts school today... Summer's gone. Sniff.~Kay
I didn't see the first version but Chen-ou is right about it working as a one-liner --definitely does.
My brain is only working on one-liners this week... :o)~Kay
Arresting imagery. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteI think this poem will work even better if it is rewritten in the form of a one-liner.
Just a thought.
Chen-ou
A one-liner arrest. :o) Thanks, Chen-ou. I'll give it a go.
ReplyDeleteLizzie starts school today... Summer's gone. Sniff.
~Kay
I didn't see the first version but Chen-ou is right about it working as a one-liner --
ReplyDeletedefinitely does.
My brain is only working on one-liners this week... :o)
ReplyDelete~Kay