Arresting imagery. Nicely done.I think this poem will work even better if it is rewritten in the form of a one-liner.Just a thought.Chen-ou
A one-liner arrest. :o) Thanks, Chen-ou. I'll give it a go.Lizzie starts school today... Summer's gone. Sniff.~Kay
I didn't see the first version but Chen-ou is right about it working as a one-liner --definitely does.
My brain is only working on one-liners this week... :o)~Kay