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The opening imagery is hauntingly poignant.Due to is biblical significant, the opening word adds extra weight to the poem.The following is a poem I wrote before the economic recession, one that echoes the theme of your poem:Sevenling (Unattented lawn)Unattented lawn.A sullen man standing behind a makeshift counter.Kids chasing after each other.Brand new flat TVs, Nintendo video games, and Dell computers ...Piles of rain-soaked This Old House magazines.An exhausted woman amidst the haggling crowd.In certain rituals we desire only what we cannot have.
Thank you, Chen-ou. I don't know about biblical significance, but I moved a lot growing up. I grew to hate garage sales, LOL. I remembered a song by Aquarius, and twisted the words to fit my poem. :o) The funny thing is, Aquarius is in the eleventh house! The things one learns online. Thank you for sharing your poem, Chen-ou. It is certainly a picture of our times! ~Kay
This reads like a 2-line senryu. I picked-up on the astrological significance and remember the song from the 1960s musical "Hair": "When the moon is in the seventh house,and Jupiter aligns with Mars, then peace will guide the planets, and love will steer the stars. This is the dawning of the Age of Aquarius..." Right?