tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post2868883104632399612..comments2023-05-23T06:27:45.215-07:00Comments on Immersed in Word: Just Passing ThroughKay Tracyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07204653574216344790noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-66732449001099224452010-08-02T18:37:43.619-07:002010-08-02T18:37:43.619-07:00Right-on!
:o) ~KayRight-on!<br /><br />:o) ~KayKayhttp://immersedinword.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-18048382674793267972010-08-02T18:12:37.237-07:002010-08-02T18:12:37.237-07:00This reads like a 2-line senryu.
I picked-up on ...This reads like a 2-line senryu. <br /><br />I picked-up on the astrological significance and remember the song from the 1960s musical "Hair": <br /><br />"When the moon is in the seventh house,<br />and Jupiter aligns with Mars, <br />then peace will guide the planets, <br />and love will steer the stars. <br />This is the dawning of the Age of Aquarius..." <br /><br />Right?Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12945352610103167449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-30994155313477153872010-08-02T08:37:09.097-07:002010-08-02T08:37:09.097-07:00Thank you, Chen-ou. I don't know about biblica...Thank you, Chen-ou. I don't know about biblical significance, but I moved a lot growing up. I grew to hate garage sales, LOL. I remembered a song by Aquarius, and twisted the words to fit my poem. :o) The funny thing is, Aquarius is in the eleventh house! The things one learns online. <br /><br />Thank you for sharing your poem, Chen-ou. It is certainly a picture of our times! ~KayKay Tracyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07204653574216344790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-50594767397111963152010-08-02T08:23:51.793-07:002010-08-02T08:23:51.793-07:00The opening imagery is hauntingly poignant.
Due t...The opening imagery is hauntingly poignant.<br /><br />Due to is biblical significant, the opening word adds extra weight to the poem.<br /><br />The following is a poem I wrote before the economic recession, one that echoes the theme of your poem:<br /><br />Sevenling (Unattented lawn)<br /><br /><br />Unattented lawn.<br />A sullen man standing behind a makeshift counter.<br />Kids chasing after each other.<br /><br />Brand new flat TVs, Nintendo video games, and Dell computers ...<br />Piles of rain-soaked This Old House magazines.<br />An exhausted woman amidst the haggling crowd.<br /><br />In certain rituals we desire only what we cannot have.Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6126088940278550727.post-21726913719632127302010-08-02T08:16:55.054-07:002010-08-02T08:16:55.054-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com