A sense of suspense is subtly conveyed.I enjoyed the read.Thanks!Chen-ou
Thank you, Chen-ou.
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Oops, caught my typos...Kay,You even have Chen-ou responding with sibilant "esses". LOLHe's right, they do do give the lines a heightened suspense juxtaposed against the hard consonants that follow.Nicely treatment.
Phew. I began to wonder about the hard "c's" but I could not find better words, for now. It's funny... this poem was hiding in my junk. I began working on something else that wouldn't work. This one seems so out of place right now, but there it is. Thank you for your sibling yeses!! :o) ~Kay