Saturday, February 5, 2011

Piqued Twins

rocky
rivers peek--streams
of conscious points along
the craggy face--tears in snowy
summits

3 comments:

  1. Wonderful to hear your voice, Kay.

    A rich, suggestive cinquain. Your appreciation of what the form can do is profound -- so many metrical and musical possibilities.

    The allusive "Piqued Twins" made me smile. You are one of the few contemporary cinquain poets to use titles and render them integral as a sixth line.

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  2. Kay,

    glad you're back with a well-crafted poem.

    I second Brian. The allusion adds emotional weight to the poem.

    Look forward to reading more of your poems.

    Chen-ou

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  3. It's very good to hear your comments again. It may take me a bit to get back in the groove, but I am looking forward to it (and spring!).

    Many thanks for your constant encouragement.
    ~Kay

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