Sunday, November 21, 2010

Punctuated Variegations

A leaf
falls from the branch(,)
with brittle lines(,) it cracks
the vein along its central core--
broken

3 comments:

  1. very good blog, congratulations
    regard from Reus Catalonia
    thank you

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  2. Getting all experimental and avant-garde on us, eh?

    I like this. Lots.

    So good to hear you singing.

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  3. Kay,

    Glad to read your poem again.

    Now, I see the points you made in reply to my poem ("snow deepening") today.

    I'm impressed by the visual details and your use of punctuation.

    Look forward to reading more of your poems.

    Chen-ou

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