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Impressive imagery.This is a very imaginative poem, and like "Cold Affronts" and "Premonitions," it could be read as a well-crafted gogyohka.By the way, have you paid attention to the discussions regarding gogyohka at Twitter? In my view, your poems are far better than most of the so-called "gogyohka" posted there.The five poetic phrases are well-delineated in your poems.Just some thoughts.Chen-ou
Chen-ou,Thank you! With school's first week, I'm afraid Twitter will have to wait. I am allowing myself a little blog poetry time each evening, my reward for long days. Your words make me want to continue to write! (Though we'll see what emerges as my eyes get heavier! LOL.)Always,Kay