Tuesday, August 3, 2010

Memory Lane

old house
abandoned in
yards of dusky velvet
scent, musky messages beckon
tenants

dusty
sills reveal trace
of scrivened love printed
indices too young to be filed
away

windows
wink with broken
glasses, sweeping glances
lighting on the heirloom books left
open

8 comments:

  1. Beautiful, Kay. Haunting in suggestion. You must be starting to think in cinquain!

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  2. This pom could be read as a cinquain sequence. It conveys a sense of unfinishedness, waiting for the reader to furnish both imagery and meaning.

    The concluding imagery is hauntingly beautiful.

    Kay, nicely done!

    Chen-ou

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  3. Thank you, Brian. I may have a theme to work on, and I remembered a poem I wrote some months ago. The cinquain forced me to get rid of stuff that I thought I wanted. I know the memories of a child aren't always reliable, but this house was my dream house. (I am beginning to think how strange I was as a child, ha ha) I wanted to grow up and fix it! It's probably long gone... except in my head. :o) ~Kay

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  4. Chen-ou! Once again, my friend, we are typing in tandem. :o) Thank you for your thoughts. I think you're right, "a sense of unfinishedness!" What a great way to put it. ~Kay

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  5. Ok, this is haunting. I re-read Brian's comment, and realized the poem could describe an old woman! Have I foretold my future?? Kind of spooky... ~Kay

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  6. I always had a thing for old dilapidated housed when I was a kid. I wanted to live in a "haunted" Victorian gothic. But I didn't want to clean it up. I wanted to keep it the way it was - cobwebs and all.
    I think that might have made me an even stranger child than you, Kay.

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  7. LOL. I loved "The Munsters" and "The Addams Family"...

    You?

    ~Kay

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  8. That's EXACTLY the kind of house I had in mind. The houses in those shows were my inspiration! LOL

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