Thursday, July 29, 2010

Hell's Bells

lying in a casket
coma; toes awake
to pull the string
to ring... ring... ringing

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  1. The use of repetition is emotionally effective.

    Chen-ou

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  3. This poem is so well-written and so terrifying,
    it makes my blood run cold.

    Brian

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  4. Sorry, Brian. I'll remove my dread locks now...
    ~Kay

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  6. Dreadlocks: not a look everyone can pull off. But I'm sure your are among those who can, Kay. (Obviously your blog photo was taken some time ago...? :-)

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  7. LOL! Did you spew your coffee while coming up with that very kind response?? Oh, so funny. I was playing with words... Sorry. Yes, those who pull off the dreadlocks well are gorgeous people. I am not one of them. The hair must be just so. I DO want cornrows, but I need to have patience and let my hair grow long enough! Thanks for lighting my day, Brian! ~Kay

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  8. Yeah, too many who attempt the look just wind-up looking like they need a good shampoo and a comb.

    Cornrows can be very beautiful.

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